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Re: Thr man who lost time ( Original - Čovjek koji je izgubio vrijeme)
Hi there! Thanks for the English translation. This is a spooky story! You have a lot of dialogue here that can get a little confusing because there are no dialogue ...
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Re: LET IT BURN FOREVER
I saw this before when you first posted it but I failed to try reading it aloud then. What a treat! Your meter is more than competent in most places. ...
Sep 20 -
Re: Spoilers for the end
Hi there! I see this is an SCP-inspired piece, nice! I love Sawyer’s initials at the end, how you snuck in a sly little homage to your inspiration for this ...
Sep 20 -
Re: WoS Ch2 - Enter: Kouji
First the suggestions/nitpicks, then the answers for the questions! Let’s go! The two were covering each other’s weak points in a way that spoke of years of collaboration. I’m pretty ...
Sep 20 -
Re: WoS Chapter 1 Part 2: Kei
As you suggested I will just answer the questions for this chapter, except I also nitpick some things because I can’t resist. behind the older, heavy-set boy should be behind ...
Sep 19 -
Re: but anatomy can be tranquil too
Alright, part two! This is a surprising turn for me, as you alluded to in your reply to my review of the previous poem! Going back to that I see ...
May 30 -
Re: Fire
Happy Review Day! So then, let's get into it. There are some nice choices here. I like how you illustrated the difference between the positive and negative stanzas through the ...
May 30 -
Re: What does it mean to be Asian?
I like this poem, it clearly came from a deeply personal place. I'm not going to do a very in depth critique about the themes or anything because I feel ...
Apr 22 -
Re: 7 Minutes Left -- 6:00|Part 1
First Impressions Less happens in this part than the climactic part I reviewed before or really any of the parts before it seems, but this must be an important memory ...
Apr 21 -
Re: 7 Minutes Left -- 7:00|Part 4
First Impressions The climax to minute 7! While I haven't reviewed the previous parts, rest assured I have read them! Let's get into it. Quite the reveal! I was thinking ...
Apr 21 -
Re: Penance Unto Me, For Me
Hi there! Let's get on with a critique of this poem, shall we? I like the complicated but reprehensible character you portray here. The emotions are all mostly relatable, and ...
Apr 20 -
Re: WoS Chapter 1 Part 1: Zoe
Well, you were kind enough to do two reviews of my work today, so I better at least do my second review of your work of all time. Sweating smile ...
Apr 17 -
Re: David Foster Wallace Keeps His Head
Oh snap! Now I have to finish Infinite Jest to review this! No, I doubt that's necessary. I just wanted to call back to my comment on your Napoleon Dynamite ...
Apr 10 -
Re: “The Fog”
Alright, let's jump right into this wild piece! I love how you suddenly crash the reader head on into this smorgasbord of judgmental description of all these characters from the ...
Apr 10 -
Re: World of Souls - Prologue
Alright, it's finally time to dig into one of Tikaya's frighteningly long fanfictions. (Novels that are posted as a million short chapters at a rate of ten chapters a day ...
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